paraded and herded like cattle
scatted and pelted like street dogs
counted and cooped like poultry
numb and gelid they lie
only thing human
is a desire
for a quick
smokeless
death
paraded and herded like cattle
scatted and pelted like street dogs
counted and cooped like poultry
numb and gelid they lie
only thing human
is a desire
for a quick
smokeless
death
Know what I really love about this poem. How each line is shorter than the last, then the three the same size as if they are building up, until — bam — death. Very powerful visual with the format.
Thank you for reading!
I agree with Tara. Also, the first four lines had a rhythm like a train carrying cargo, which given the context of your poem is a chilling detail.
Thanks Nathan. I loved the Nonet form.
Comparing the victims to animals is apt, considering how they were treated — very effective use of the form.
Thank you.Was reading an article about the Holocaust.It was brutal.
I love the way each line decreased one syllable. That was a very effective way to wind the pace down to the final word. This was powerful, both in content and form.
Thanks Asha. I’m glad it worked.
This was certainly intense.
Yes, I was moved by something I was reading recently.
I love using precise words like gelid, although sometimes we have to be careful to make sure that context clarifies their imagery. For myself, I’m not sure about the ending; it’s powerful, but feels more like an author projection than an interpretation of the actual accounts of survivors.
Yes , you are right Rowan! I should have used ‘maybe’ or some other words to show that these were my thoughts.Appreciate your keen eye and feedback.
As others have said, you picked a great form for this difficult subject matter. It’s a winding-down, a trickling-away, a tightening screw. Nicely done.
Thank you Christine!
I enjoyed the way your words float downhill. This has a really nice rhythm.
Thanks a lot Stacie!Appreciate your reading and leaving ac comment!